Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Long Sault Parkway/archive1

::Alright, so first off, thank you on the animation, it was pretty fun to make! So I’ve made some adjustments, and in conjunction with the above comment that I made, that should cover everything except the fifth (“”I followed the route description to ””), and the last point (“”Is there any history on the road since 1958?””). Regarding the former, I’m curious if you might have a suggestion on wording the description without overusing the word “causeway”? As for the latter, There have been no significant changes since the parkway opened fully in 1959. The only thing I think could cover the time period after that would be attendance and perhaps seasonal operations (as pointed out by Hog Farm below); the St. Lawrence Parks Commission only seems to track overall attendance throughout the entire system, and not park by park. – ”'[[User:Floydian|<span style=”color: #0051BA;”>Floydian</span>]]”’&nbsp;^{[[User_talk:Floydian|<span style=”color: #3AAA3A;”>τ</span>]]} _{[[Special:Contributions/Floydian|<span style=”color: #3AAA3A;”>¢</span>]]} 03:04, 22 November 2021 (UTC)

::Alright, so first off, thank you on the animation, it was pretty fun to make! So I’ve made some adjustments, and in conjunction with the above comment that I made, that should cover everything except the fifth (“”I followed the route description to ””), and the last point (“”Is there any history on the road since 1958?””). Regarding the former, I’m curious if you might have a suggestion on wording the description without overusing the word “causeway”? As for the latter, There have been no significant changes since the parkway opened fully in 1959. The only thing I think could cover the time period after that would be attendance and perhaps seasonal operations (as pointed out by Hog Farm below); the St. Lawrence Parks Commission only seems to track overall attendance throughout the entire system, and not park by park. – ”'[[User:Floydian|<span style=”color: #0051BA;”>Floydian</span>]]”’&nbsp;^{[[User_talk:Floydian|<span style=”color: #3AAA3A;”>τ</span>]]} _{[[Special:Contributions/Floydian|<span style=”color: #3AAA3A;”>¢</span>]]} 03:04, 22 November 2021 (UTC)

:::Wait, so the “Long Sault Parkway” also applies to the islands? If so, then I think there should be a separate section then for the islands, where you could mention the names and stuff (instead of the route description). Like, the opening sentence says that the parkway connects the group of islands – perhaps you should specify something like: “The Long Sault Parkway is a 10.1-kilometre (6.3 mi) scenic parkway that connects, and is the name for, a group of eleven islands west of Cornwall in the Canadian province of Ontario.” I’m not sure if that exact wording is ideal, but the article needs to reflect that it’s not just a road article. It vaguely reminds me of [[Afsluitdijk]], which is the name for a causeway and a dam in the Netherlands. It makes sense that the name and history would be the same for the road and the island group, but that just needs to be made clearer. Ref 3 calls them the “Long Sault Parkway Islands”, FWIW. ♫ [[User:Hurricanehink|Hurricanehink]] (<small>[[User_talk:Hurricanehink|talk]]</small>) 16:44, 22 November 2021 (UTC)

:::Wait, so the “Long Sault Parkway” also applies to the islands? If so, then I think there should be a separate section then for the islands, where you could mention the names and stuff (instead of the route description). Like, the opening sentence says that the parkway connects the group of islands – perhaps you should specify something like: “The Long Sault Parkway is a 10.1-kilometre (6.3 mi) scenic parkway that connects, and is the name for, a group of eleven islands west of Cornwall in the Canadian province of Ontario.” I’m not sure if that exact wording is ideal, but the article needs to reflect that it’s not just a road article. It vaguely reminds me of [[Afsluitdijk]], which is the name for a causeway and a dam in the Netherlands. It makes sense that the name and history would be the same for the road and the island group, but that just needs to be made clearer. Ref 3 calls them the “Long Sault Parkway Islands”, FWIW. ♫ [[User:Hurricanehink|Hurricanehink]] (<small>[[User_talk:Hurricanehink|talk]]</small>) 16:44, 22 November 2021 (UTC)

::::If that’s the case (as it appears to be), then I think the “islands” section should be a bit broader. You’d need to include the size of the islands, and as mentioned below, the flora/fauna, the climate. I think the islands section should include the naming, so the route description can be a bit more focused on the roadway itself. I hate to ask, since the article is now on FAC, but the entire topic might be better focused if all of the information was located in the [[Lost Villages]] article. There’s a lot of overlap between the roadway, the islands, and the villages themselves. As it stands, the article has an unclear focus, being kinda about the road, kinda about the islands, and a large portion on the dam and the flooding. That equally applies to the Lost Villages article. I’m not going to oppose the article on those grounds, as you might want to still pursue this article at FAC, and the suggestion of a refocused article might be unactionable. ♫ [[User:Hurricanehink|Hurricanehink]] (<small>[[User_talk:Hurricanehink|talk]]</small>) 16:48, 24 November 2021 (UTC)

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